Writing Test 31
Task 1: The bar chart below gives information about the number of students studying Computer Science at a UK university between 2010 and 2012.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
Task 2:Some physiologists recommend that it is important to overcome stresses by spending time do nothing. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Write at least 250 words.
It is irrefutable that, since people have become workaholic in modern era,stress is a big concern for individuals.Performing entire day multitasking skills they get exhaust and try to come out from the hectic schedule.Some physiologists believe that it is a good idea to seat alone rather than indulge in another activity;however,it can be mitigated through various activities.Furthermore,I personally disagree with the notion of physiologists and in the following section I will discuss both views along with my arguments.
Examining all the arguments,the primary one to prove my view is people have plenty of activities to alleviate the stress.Firstly,people feel relax and forget stress when they indulge in activities such as exercise,swimming,walking,gym. Moreover,it keeps their mind calm,blood circulation,hormones changes and it vouchsafes a great opportunity to interact with their loved once,peers and share their feelings with each other.Secondly,technology is proliferating at startling pace and it is a corner stone for individuals where they make new friends,play games,show comical shows and multifarious people utilize it to spend their quality time.Additionally,once they have engaged in other activities ,they do not get time to think about stress or scourges.Another point worth noting is,in India,everyday 80% myriad people have been going to Yoga center to get refresh,fit and health.It is a well known method to ameliorate stress and Yoga centers have initiated in every city and village.
On the contrary,human mind is similar as machine.While,after working entire day it is absolutely arduous to pay attention in another activities. Some like to spend their leisure time with their family and there is a cliche,in time of test family is the best, whilst others dive in the deep ocean of sweet old memories.
To recapitulate,weighing up both sides of the arguments,there are more pros than cons in this issue.Although sitting idle acquire physically relax,plethora of activities provide entertainment to run out from stress and people feel that they are living their life to the fullest.
(PLZ tell me here any grammar mistakes,article mistakes,idea is not good,in 3rd para correct use of while and in conclusion the sentence—–weighing up both sides)(ALSO give me bands)
They get exhausted not exhaust. Sit alone not seat alone, better word is to sit in solitude. Much better introduction this time, good. Feel relaxed not relax. Going to gym, not gym because gym alone is not an activity. Watch comical shows not show. Do not use percentage with myriad. Fit and healthy not health. Have opened not initiated, avoid using this word since you use it in more wrong sense then right. Do not use word cliche it is informal. Sitting idle makes us physically relaxed not acquire. Better attempt can easily get 6.5 bands.
The bar graph reveals the number of the native and international students who had been studying in UK university since two years.
According to the graph,British boys students had recorded approximately 38 at initial year while their growth dramatically plunged almost more than half in the following year.Afterwards, it sharply swelled and peaked at a high point at the end of the year.Whilst nearly twenty International males students had embarked to study at UK at first year,second year number of men up surged swiftly and kissed at high point in last year.
As per the graph,native girls students noted almost 32, whereas soared quickly in the following year round about 44 in 2011.It slightly step up and reached it’s zenith point,kissed at 45 in 2012.Furthermore,roughly 14 international females students had initiated to take education at UK in 2010 and admissions went up North gradually in the following two years and at the end of the period it was 20.
Overall,in British, both genders had been studying maximum than international genders within a time span of two years.International males and females had a linear pattern in the upward direction within two years.
Not had been studying but were studying. Do not write initial year, write in 2010. Their number plunged not growth. It is not following year because the following year for 2010 is 2011, following means what comes next. Do not use word kissed it is informal. Instead of maximum use more. Instead of step up write increased. Stop using word initiate you use it in more wrong sense than right.